Här är exempel på tre elevtexter och bedömingen av dessa. Texterna har skrivits av elever i år nio under temat Love.


A person who means a lot to me.

The person is my mother. She means the world to me. That dosent mean that I hate my father I like him to but not as mutch as I like my mother. I never lie to my mother and she nose it. I can tell my mother anything I want. But not my father he has a short fuse. Me mother bays me anything I want like a mopped. I got when I was 14 yars old but I have to desrve it. My mother always yell at me bacause I never clean me rum or cam home late but she never I mean neaver sware at me becaws she nows I’ll get mad and threw things and brake things and get out of the home. I don’t like to go out with my mother becaws she always gose in to the stors and never cam back. But I like to go out with my father when I don’t have anything to do he always gose to cafes to meet his brodors ( my anculs ). We have a nice lafe. And talk about sport and some adher things. Me mother dasent work now becaws she is going to operait her hand. She use to work in Pallinis tyger her in Rinkeby. She always hellps me with me homework. The best thing I like about me mother is that she has a good sens of humer and jokes a lot. My mother lets me have girlfriends but she donest lest me bring them home.

Eleven skriver engagerat, personligt och försöker ge en nyanserad bild, även om han kunde ha fokuserat ytterligare och fördjupat sitt resonemang. Texten är skriven på ett enkelt och begripligt språk med visst flyt och variation. Texten innehåller en rad elementära fel, främst när det gäller stavningen, vilket kan försvåra förståelsen.

Betyg: Godkänd.

I really wanted to scratch their eyes out!

Ok, now I have something to tell you readers. You have no idea what happened to me about two months ago. You see I was dating this guy from school, his name was Cole Deshanel, and he was so cute and his eyes were beautifil, and he had the cutest dimples onnhis cheek, I was so in love whit him, he was like a prince, he treated me well and every other girls in school were so jealous at me, you should seen how they looked at me.
Now I have this best friend and her name is Carol, she always supported me and she used to be on my side no matter what.
Two months ago we had our school prom and she was like Cinderella and Cole was my Prince of course. I had a beautiful white silk dress on, and Cole had a black tie on. And every other girls eyes were at Cole, but I was so happy bacause he was mine. We danced laughed all night long, we had a great time until I went to the ladies room. That was the biggest mistake in my life, you have no idea what happened while I were in the ladies room. You see I came back and I could not find Cole! I asked everybody but no one knew where he was except Linda, she is our schools paparazzi, she said that Cole and Carol went out to the park to get some “fresh air”. I went to the park and there they were sitting and making out!
I came forward to them, Carol my own best friend how could she do this to me, and Cole I was so in love whit him, and so mad at them. I really wanted to scratch their eyes out. They saw me and Carol came to me like nothing had happened but it did! I screamed at her and gave her a box on her ear, and I spited on Coles face, and I don not regret in the slightest, they both deserved it!
After that I am not talking to any of them. Every time I see Colel on the hallway he always changes direction. And Carol is so afraid of me, she can not even look in my eyes, I think she is ashamed of me and she should be!
Now I really know who is my real friends and who is not, and I know what kind of guy I should date now, not the perfect ones because they are the ones who hurts you the most and I knew that Cole was to good to be true. But thanks to Carol and Cole I am the most popular girl in school!

Texten är lång, fyllig, personlig och innehåller reflektioner och konsekvenser. Eleven vågar beskriva känslor och lyckas till största delen. Språket är relativt varierat och det är gott flyt och liv i texten. Eleven har ett gott ordförråd och använder några idiomatiska uttryck. Eleven tar risker i sin språkanvändning och är uppfinningsrik, om ej helt säker. Texten har en tydlig struktur och ett budskap förmedlas. I texten förkommer tempusfel och ordvalsfel.

Betyg: Väl godkänd.

Lonely_Girl

After a hard day of work, James Cambell was waiting for the bus. James, a 26 year old construction worker from Alabama, had just moved to L.A to start a new life. As he was waiting for the bus, he realized that he was lonely. He had no friends in L.A, except from that Indian guy from the Corner Shop, whatever his name was. He also realized that he had a boring life, as he did nothing after work, but to go home to sleep. When the bus came he decided to change that.
When James arrived to his place, the first thing he did was to pick up the dusty laptop from under the bed. He turned it on and connected to the web, as he wished to find a new friend through the chat. After one hour he was chatting with six different persons, but no one seemed to be an interesting person. Disappionted, James was about to turn off his computer when a new character joined the chat. This character seemed to be a girl, mostly because she was called Lonely_Girl. She seemed to match to match him more than perfect so he gave her a chance. After chatting for four hours, they exchanged e-mails, so they could write to each other. Lonely_Girl sent the first e-mail. That e-mail was the start of a friendship that would never end. They wrote every day for 6 months. They were such matching characters, and had so much to talk about that they forgot that they had the possibility to meet. But later on, the question would appear. It was james who took the first step, and asked if they should meet. After sending the e-mail he waited for a direct answer from Lonely_Girl. After five minutes of waiting, he raelized that he had scared her off. He was just about to close the lap top when she just answered. She agreed to meet him. And so they dicided to meet outside a restaurant in town. So next day, James went to the resataurant and waited with excitement for his pen pal. They agreed to meet at 16:00, but James went a little earlier to get a decent table. After waiting for two hours he finally decided to leave as she didn’t show up. Disappointed once again, he payed the bill and was about to leave the restaurant when he bumped into a woman. She had brown hair and was around 25 years old.
When his eyes met hers, James heart started to go faster. It was love at first sight. When she saw the rose in the pocket of his jacket, they also knew that they have been known each other for over six months, so they really had not much to talk about, they just looked at each other all night.

Texten är en väldisponerad berättelse med fylligt innehåll. Den är präglad av mycket god berättarteknik och stor berättarglädje. Eleven uttrycker sig tydligt, sammanhängande och variationsrikt. Eleven har ett mycket stort ordförråd, använder idiomatiska uttryck och har en god förmåga att beskriva ett händelseförlopp med inlevelse och flyt.

Betyg: Mycket väl godkänd.